How to Describe

So, you know how to write now because of my previous articles/posts. Now, I present you with a new post that teaches you how to describe! Describing is very important in a story. It gives the reader a clear picture in his/her mind. I'm going to write a scene twice. One is going to be very well described, the other not described well.

Here we go.

Sophie Racine was a good student, but she struggled in math. Her friends knew this, and every day, asked her how math class went. She would always ignore this, and go on to describe another one of her classes. But one day, the usual routine of asking how math went was broken. Her friends were persistent and always asked her how class went, and today she answered. "Well," she said, "I'm going to narrate this in third period. Ready?" Her friends nodded eagerly. "Well. Sophie Racine was sitting at her desk, her math book draped over her lap. She was wearing a orange and pink polka dotted dress with a blue background and blue leggings. Her composition notebook was on her desk, a mess of scribbles and crossed out numbers. Her hair was down, but her mouth was wide open, along with all of her 14 classmates, because a fly had just flown into Mr. Smith's mouth, mid-sentence.


Okay. Here is the same event, but described either better or worse.

Sophie struggled in math. She never answered her friends. They asked questions about how math had gone. One day she answered in the third person: Sophie was sitting on at her desk with a math book on her lap. She was wearing a dress and leggings that matched and were dark blue. Her mouth was open along with the rest of the class because a fly had just flown into Mr. Smith's mouth, while he was in the middle of saying something about how to divide.


I guess that was kind of obvious, but do you see what I'm saying? You need to describe well to have a good story. I hope this helped!